Robert Todd Felton literary and adventure travel

What I Meant to Say

May 23, 2008, 10:40 am

Well, I am still going through the page proofs for Walking Boston.  I have left indexing for a moment to just work on proofing the pages. Every once in a while, I come across a sentence and wonder, "what the hell was I thinking?"  It's not just that there is a type or a word missing, the sentence just doesn't make any sense.  Most of these gems (don't worry, there aren't that many!) come from places where I respnded to an editor's query or added info on the fly but didn't quite weave the new text in with the existing sentence.  In other places, I just chose the most tangled, circuitous way of saying something when a simple, straightforward sentence would be much better.

 It makes me think about how often our meaning must be obscured or completely garbled.  It's a wonder we get any meaning across.  For all it's potential, language is, except in the hands of the most gifted of thinkers, a clumsy and blunt tool.  The previous sentence is a great example.  Lest I be accused of being down on writing or writers, this observation is actually inspirational.  It reminds me that so much of good writing happens in further stages and drafts rather than in a "just put it all down" stroke of genius.  I'm neither the first nor the most clever to come to that conclusion, but it is an important one to remember as I go back through this manuscript.  This is where I make my stand against bad writing -- against tangled sentences and garbled syntax.  Here is where I do my best writing -- frequently by cutting and deleting (more on that later).

What works for you when revising?  What tricks and strategies have led to your best writing? 

Eric Nichols says:

I've been trying to say what

I've been trying to say what I've meant to say for 20 years, but I don't think I've got it down yet.  Let me know when you have the secret figgered out!

eric

Robert Todd Felton says:

Ahh, the truth is ne'er so easy

Eric  - perhaps is what I need to do more often is first figure out what I want to say, then worry about how to say that.  Or, just let people make their own meaning - they will anyway.

 Thanks for commenting.

Todd

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Max Sindell says:

Reminds me of a good story...

One of the best stories about writing I ever heard was from a teacher of mine attending a writing seminar in Mississippi with Eudora Welty. It was the sixth or seventh day of the seminar, and the whole time they had been writing and rewriting a short story. They went around the room handing them in, until one woman handed hers to Eudora with a flourish and said, "This is my final draft." According to legend, Eudora simply smiled, shook her head and said, "Dear, it's all a draft until you die."

-Max Sindell, Red Room

Robert Todd Felton says:

absolutely brilliant

Now that is the type of example of language used with lazer precision.  Even the "dear," is priceless. It reminds me of Dorothy Parker who came out with these things daily.

Thanks for commenting Max.

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